Mommy, I can't wait to see you.
Are your eyes brown or blue?
Mommy, I can't wait to smile
And thank you for carrying me all this while.
Mommy, I can't wait to coo
And say one day, "I love you."
Mommy, I can't wait for your touch.
I want to love you so much.
Mommy, do you love me too?
Do you love me as I love you?
Mommy, why do you fear?
Don't you want me here?
Mommy, someone is hurting me.
Something sharp is piercing me.
Mommy, they are using a knife!
They are taking away my life!
Mommy, do you hear me crying?
Do you feel me dying?
Mommy, take away the knife.
Please! Don't end my life!
Mommy, why did you send me away
Before I saw the light of day?
Mommy, I haven't seen your face
I haven't known your tender embrace.
Mommy, I never had the chance to coo.
I wasn't able to say, "I love you."
Why did you take away my life
With that cold and bitter knife?
Author notes
I feel very strongly about this subject.
This is for subject #5 Abortion for the contest.
Written June 26th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- What makes you passionate? by TabbyJoy.
900 points, ended March 24, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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PS...I just read some of the comments below...you're sparking some controversy! It makes me sad to see so many people refer to a precious child as "fetus." It just goes to show how our society is so desensitized to the value of a life, no matter how small. Again, thanks for writing this...someone needs to defend the smallest among us who cannot defend themselves.
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This made me cry...I agree wholeheartedly. Thanks for writing this.
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I feel the same way you do. Thank you for entering my contest and sharing your heartfelt views.
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Wow! I liked this poem, so powerful and so true- I love the way you've written this from the child's perspective, making it all the more powerful. I'll check out some of your more recent stuff now because this was great. Keep up the good work
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Now that's a polite way to disagree. Thanks for evaluating the poem and not just the content of what I expressed.
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I don't agree with your opinion, but I did like the poem.
An organism so young is not even conscious, let alone able to formulate such complex thoughts. And if you start saying that stem-cell extraction is just as bad, I'm gonna have to start bustin' some caps.
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like a happy greeting card from hell.
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Wow, this was a great job you did, I like how you fought for what you believe from the baby's piont of view. Thank you for entering my contest.
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I would gladly discuss this, but I won't get in a debate in the comments reply. We can discuss this via IM or email. I'll just say there are other options for the cases presented in you argument other than murdering a baby. For more of my views on this matter, I've written a column "Thoughts on Abortion."
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Okay, I see where your coming from. I do realise that life is valuble to many people. But you have to take in to consideration the quality of life the baby is going to have. And I'm pretty sure a fetus doesn't know what a knife is, it does not know what a mother is, or eyes, when you speak against abortion you are not speaking for the unborn baby, the baby can't even form words yet, you are just speaking for your belief, etc. It doesn't know what exsists so it has nothing to lose...if you get what I mean. As far as quality of life goes I don't know your opinions on rape etc. But I know that the majority of women that want abortions are teenagers who got pregnant from sleeping around. They shouldn't sleep around they wern't responsible and should have to deal with this situation they got themselves into seems to be the argument for this. But arn't you fighting for the life or a child? The mother is not going to care for the child and be responsible about it if they see it as a punishment for sleeping around. And teenagers will always be irresponsible and sleep around, it's just something you have to accept. So would you really want the baby to be born and be raised by a teenager who slept with someone accedently and was irresponsible? And probably wouldn't take enough time to find the right parents for the baby if they chose adoption? What if that girl had been taking drugs during her pregnancy that would later screw up the baby? I guess I'm assuming your opinions on the situation matter but it seemed like you were genralising in your poem. In the situation of rape, well I just think that's fucked if you want them to still have the baby, what if you had a rapist for a dad? What if the baby inherited whatever was wrong with the father? I don't know. I'm just giving my opinion. It's good that you expressed yourself and this was a powerful poem all the same. Please comment me back if you have anything else to say after my comment. I like debating. Good job on the poem.
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THis is very good, thanks for sharing this with me. I guess this is a very hot topic and we are not on the side of the majority on this site. I have receive some nasty comments on my poem. But I feel very strongly about this issue. We need more people to stand up and be heard since these poor defenseless children can not speak for themselves.
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Score one for the rights of the unborn
Thank you for having raised your voice for the defense of the unborn child. We need more consciousness raising like this. -
powerful
this one really got me.......wow.......for the child to be having the conversation with the mother was chilling......very powerful write.......thanks for entering....... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Stephanie~~~~~~~~~~~~ 
I wrote on this subject allpoetry.com/Poem/680840 just in case you are interested.....
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NICE PIECE. I LOVE IT. When i was in school the last semester we were talking about abortions and people had different feelings, but i think your poem could help those who were against abortions.
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excellent
i agree that this is a really powerful write. and i disagree with abortions as well, but i do agree with "NurseHayley"...every circumstance is different. but i think this is a really great poem and i wish you luck in the contest!!!
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Abortions are so sad and horrible, I think you captured the feelings in this poem. Powerful write.
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I am so impressed, especially after reading the above comments...that this poem had actually influenced someone to look at abortion from a baby's point of view, instead of only from a woman's. this is great, I'm all the way with you here, and best wishes to you in this contest!
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Wow thanks. I'm very glad to know this poem had an affect on someone as it did you. It's great you have an open enough mind to see a different point of view.
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WOW... I need a second to collect my thoughts. I have always been a person who trys to see both sides of a situation, but this poem may have changed my mind about abortion. Reading this from the point of view of an innocent child.... I am left feeling shocked, and almost ashamed of myself because I thought only about the a woman's right to chose, and never about an unborn child's right to live. This was one of those poems that you come accross that really changes a person. You truly gave me a different perspective, and I don't think I'll ever feel the same way about abortion again. An excellent, eye opening poem.
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omg I love this I wish people would actually think about the baby they are carrying instead of themselves.. very descriptive poem it reminded me of an abortion video I had to watch in my religion class my sophomore year of high school.
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This was very well written and it definately has a lot of strong emotion and sadness... I believe however that abortion is the only route for some people, for whatever reason. I could argue this subject til the cows come home, but each individual case MUST be looked at differently to ensure a right and fair decision.
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You took a very gross image and gave it life: a life many of us wish would be given those yet unborn. Very well written with good rhythm, rhyme, flow and imagery.
Good luck in the contest! Love and hugs, BonnieQ
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wow this is a beautyiful poem.. and cover a very tough subject.. this is written very well.. and is seriously a really great poem! wow... but i love how you can place yourself inm someone elsesshoes and just write.. hey well great job!
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I wrote a poem like this a few years ago when my daughter was considering abortion. I now have a strong, vibrant, almost five year old grandson that I dearly love, and so does his mother. I hope this poem, shocks the reality of "life" into a reader that needs to hear these words to make a final decision. Excellent emotions set into words. Good luck with the contest.
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Oh My Gosh! This is such an awesome piece. You have written and expressed yourself as beautifully as anyone possibly could with this subject matter. I am so impressed by your talent. Not a popular subject for sure, but you presented it with style. Thank you for such a wonderful write. This is truly a masterpiece!
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Oh this almost brought tears to my eyes. Melphleg, you did an excellent job with this. I like how you wrote it from an unborn's perspective. Hopefully those who believe in abortion, will try to imagine what it must be like to experience something like this. ~Great job~
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Ugh. I hate reading about things like these. Abortions are not things that I'm good with. It also seems like you're writing about partial-birth abortion, of which I find COMPLETELY pointless. I mean, what's the point of going through the actual labor if you're just going to kill the child anyway? There's families willing to adopt.
Also, I do not like Bush, but Kerry promotes partial-birth abortion. Agh.. both of our candidates are idiots. =]
Great write.
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