I lie upon
the Sea of You
& give my Heart Song
in waves
of Warmth
that rush upon
this rocky shoreline,
erasing the lines
of Past...
There is only
Hope
Time
& Memory...
Freedom arrives furiously
when giving your Self
to another's
Depth
& Dream...
Oh, Joy!
Its sweetness
lathers the foam...
This Light
illuminates
& Visions crash
currents rippling unseen...
July 13, 2004
6:00 p.m.
Author notes
Oceans...tides...& yes, seashells, too...the cry of the gulls, the sense of salt & sand & air laden with Hope...
what lives we lead...what lives we follow...
Written July 13th, 2004
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What did you think
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unseen but felt oh so much
metaphorically this is perfect
much like a building wave cresting and in the end trickling back to where it came
I love this side of you
wonderful piece sweet lady
peace and hugs
Muddy
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Jeepers, Richard...Thank you, Sweetie. 
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Beautiful picture painted with words. You wrote this poem that struck my heart's chords. Marvelous wonders and beauty begin with the unveiling to nature at God's hand. This is a very beautiful and well-written poem. Thank you for sharing it with me and all of AP. May God bless you in all that you do and write.
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Beautiful imagery.....
I've only been writing poetry for a few months, and have much to learn, but I adore writing about nature. Endless Moments is so soothing to read. I've had the pleasure to have visited many of the exotic beaches in Europe, courtesy of the U.S. Navy. This brings me back there, walking along the beaches of St. Thomas, in the Virgin Islands. Thank you for bringing me back, because I can't afford a plane ticket.
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interesting form
a wondewrful message in this poem...beautiful graphics here...another of your talents an eye for great graphics..PK
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As I said before, you are a true Romantic Poet, Wanda. I'm seeing that more and more with the more I read. You're now turning that romance toward me, freely. I'll gladly do the same.
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Sighhh...Such pretty words you have, Scribe...so lovely & serene...You do have a welcome way of making me smile...& think...Thank you, Rich...
Wanda
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Giving yourself to another depth...awash without thought to deny the miracle..a raft where the moon rising ever so large in the terful eyes of your first sweet smile...
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The beauty of your words is met equal to only that of the background you have chosen. Together they transform into a most unique masterpiece that swells with emotion.
A most wonderfully penned piece.
Blessings
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Thanks, my Friend...it was a lil' different for me, at the time... Wander
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Oooo, this is just plain pretty
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Thank you, Chii...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thanks, O Wondrous One...I appreciate ya, my Friend...Thanks for revisiting an older piece with me, & for your good wishes, too... Wanda
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This background fit your words like a glove dear Wanda. What a wonderful piece to fill my head. i love the sweetness and the subtle images you create here. I find the water to be such happy, tranquil place for me personally. Good luck in the contest!
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Thanks, Moon Girl...this one was my very first foray into placing a passionate write on these pages...about a month after I'd joined AP...I was kinda scared at the time...didn't know what people might think 'bout the ol' librarian...hehehe
I was pleasantly surprised...Thanks for a great contest idea...& can I at least look at Annie's gold??? roflmao 
Love you, Helen... 
Wanda
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beautiful
A beautiful poem Wanda and it captures the essense of both sea and love.Woven together as they should be.Thank you for entering and good luck.Helen
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Thanks, Poet...I am capable of writing Dark; I choose to always try to leave a Light on....I earned my screen name...Thanks for your Time...& for a great contest idea...Have fun judging!!!
Wanda
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I really do love this piece. In a world full of those that are writing darkly(which i do) You have managed to harnes contentment and peace into these tiny lines. very appropriate background. The writing uses just the right words to make the reader want whatever it is that you have harnessed in this poem. Well done.
Meracus
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Thanks, Samantha...I posted this one nearly a month after I joined AP...when I was typing it out, it almost felt like playing a keyboard...it was awesome...Thanks for your kind words, Smidge...Have a great time judging...That's a mighty impressive list of Poets ya got there... Wanda
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This is wonderful! I love how you've got the lines sort of twisting with the waves, it adds tonnes of authenticity. Great work, Wanda... and thanks so much for entering
~Samantha~ 
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Thanks, Poet...I appreciate your Time... Wanda
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i like this. its a fragment in time. i also love the line spacing, its like the waves of a sea. this is a very good write.
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Well, I'm gonna blush anyway, Nic!!! Thank you for such a wonderful, thoughty comment...I love how you think, my Friend...love the way you express yourself...& no, this ain't sucking up to the judge, neither...hehehe I have told you these things before...merely reiterating them here...I appreciate ya, Nic... Wanda
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Beautiful!
My dear, Wanda you had me from the first line “I lie upon the Sea of You” – now that paints a brain-picture! Water (the sea, waves, foam, shorelines, etc.) is always a stunning metaphor for the way we move and are moved – physically and emotionally. This poem murmurs and laps against the soul’s and the body’s shorelines and indulges all the senses. I just loved the very subtle, but utterly sensual word picture of sensuality - the freedom, the foam of dreams and ecstasies, the illumination and finally the visions crashing – absolutely captivating – sweet perplexity! Ah, a poem that causes some delicious ripples in the mind and on the skin. Lovely imagery, passion and beauty, creative construction (you should try this format and layout more), simple, yet effective vocabulary and yes, movement in this poem! I have told you before, you are good in this genre of poetry (no no, don’t blush)
. Thank you for sharing this beautiful example of poetry in motion – delightful!
~ Nicolette
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Ain't it though??? {sigh} I come back here every so~often, just to soak up the sun!!! hehehe...nice ambience, I thought...perfect background, as well...was THRILLED when I put them both together...the posting of it resembled more like playing the piano ~~~ A concerto, perhaps? It felt like I was playing the keyboards!!! & I DON'T KNOW HOW TO PLAY PIANO!!! hehehe...THANKS for the visit...& wondrous Dreams, as well!!!
~~~ Wanda ~~~
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This is a very beautiful poem...grand visions of the beach and surf are in my head...thanks...its beautiful here
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Thanks, Sweetheart...I appreciate your attention & affection... ...Wanda
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Very nice work, hon. I liked it a lot- truly its a sweet piece (sweet background, too, neh? lol ) Very good writing, hon (sorry if I don't put more down for your comment- got a leettle rushed to-day and now I'm trying to read all the new enteries- not easy to do!)
Good luck in the contest , and thank you for entering! I really appreciate it!
for Emily
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The ebb & flow of Time's passing cannot stem the waves of passion that evolve...the archeologist best wear some fire~proof gloves if he's going to be digging on this particular shoreline...the kisses were NOT stolen...
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in the shell of our flesh we find the echoes of far way places and stolen salty kisses by the seashores in the summers of our youth, and in the hollow of our skulls two thousand years from now, some futuristic archeaologist will uncover our skull and hold it to his ear ands still hear the ocean raoring through the eye hole left in worn and yellowed bone.....Artis
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Thank you, marebel...I enjoyed formatting this to emulate the breaking waves on the shoreline...wanted the emotion to be visual, as well...thanks for your time & words...Night Hope ...& Day Dreaming...
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Absolutely adore the sea and the background you have adds to the beauty and sensuality of this poem ...
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Well, Cap'n...you KNOW we pirates live & love & breathe the sea...'tis in the blood...
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Thanks, very much...this was a bit different in style for me; I very much enjoyed the writing/posting/formatting of it...thanks for kind words...
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really great write about the sea love it excellent job swan excellent job !
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Thank you, very much...& yes, you 'get it', very well...thanks fr your time & words...
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This is a wonderfuly written poem. Very very well done. Incredibly serene and peaceful word imagery. I really enjoyed this. Keep up the fantastic work!!!!!!!!!!
Jasmine
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Posies for my Friend!!! Thank you, so much!!! & That's very sweet of you, jeanpaul...you don't have to give me your points...but I WILL accept the poem you offered!!! Thank you!!!hehehe..thanks for your consistent compassion & loyal reads!!! ~~~swan~~~
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Thank you very much! I'm happy you enjoyed it...& thanks for your good wishes, as well...
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What beautiful flow and set up here. Thoroughly enjoyed this piece from beginning to end! Fantastic! and once again I wish you the best in this contest! MLP...S
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Thanks,surerbad...enjoyed entering your contest...
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'Fore most I want to thank everybody that entered my contest. This being the very first I didn’t know what to think. I will have the final judging in the allot time that is required. I
plan to have 1st, 2nd, and 3rd place winners. I am also going to be giving points on honorable mentions as well. After I pick the winner’s I will be personally leaving a comment for each and
everyone of you. I hope you enjoyed entering my contest as I will enjoy reading all the stories and poems. Thank you once again and good luck
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YES, me too!...but, hidden?...I didn't think so, but...maybe?...perhaps?..who knows...swan
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there's a lot of hidden stuff in this one,
but i think I see it - I even see the bubbles
on the sand and the dollars in the surf...
I felt the visions, rippling and crashing, too.
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& I shall help, in ANY way I can, to continue to 'change your mind about love poetry'...One great reason I started writing to begin with! Couldn't 'get into' what was being presented in classes...thus, the beginnings of 'Poetic License'...thanks for your time & words...swan
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I liked it. A lot. Which is weird cause I don't usually like love, nature, or spiritual poems. But lately I've been reading and liking them. Maybe my poetry taste are changing. Keep on writing.
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DC!!! How ya been? my ol' muahahahahahaha friend! Glad to see you way over here in my neck of the woods...Thanks so much for the visit; glad you liked it...I was rather pleased...be well, my friend...swan
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Open Eyes, thanks for the visit & your glowing remarks...I appreciate your time & thoughts...swan
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Thanks for the visit, nadir...I appreciate your time & words, as always...be well, my Poet friend...swan
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Thanks again, Lady!...swan
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wow wanda this is an awesome poem full of great emotion i enjoyed it alot you are a great writer and thanx for leaving me this he he to read he he huggles and muahahahaha your now a member of the muahahahah´s congrats he he
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this is an incredible poem
i love the way you start out 'i lie upon the sea of you'
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"the sea of you"- mmmmm...
you make good use of alliteration, "waves of warmth" was nice,
and the imagery of the ocean etc and the way it was all tied together was lovely... the rocky shoreline part was my favourite, it said a lot symbolic, as did the whole poem which i interpreted as being not just about a moment but perhaps a relationship and perhaps a soul.. "freedom arrives furiously" was again great use of alliteration and just tripped off the tongue yes i enjoyed reading this muchly, there's something about the ocean that makes great poetry
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Thanks, Jessa...please see notes at the top of my author's page...& contest held by poet ILTL4eva7...take care of yourself...swan
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very good swan! thanks for sharing this. the imagry was fabulous i also like the layout of this - it's very pretty!
have a great day
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Thanks, my Friend Nour...it's now one of MY favorites as well...I had fun doing it...it was a inspired rush again...wonderful stuff, the creative feelings we have...swan
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Swanee.. This is one of my favorites!
Beach.. the most wonderful place on earth (along with Tour Effeil ofcourse)
You did a great job.. your descriptions almost took me there..
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Thank you, pozo...your words fell softly as well.. swan
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{faints dead away}
'Smelling salts! I need my smelling salts!!! Quick! I think there's some in the poem 'The Passing of the Victorian Age'!!! (shameless promo time!)
Good Lord, Woman!!! That oughta get me a date!!! (roflmao)...YOU ARE, FOR SURE, TOO MUCH!!! (but don't stop NOW! lol...is that ALL you can think of?!? hmmm?!?) gosh we are so silly for quasi-grown-ups!!! lmao...Oh Girlfriend...you're a trip thru MY wires...I loves ya!!! ...de swan (Hey everyone!!! Read this woman's work!!!)
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This is beautifully written, well done I loved each word falling softly into place
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MAN, SHE'S QUICK
NOOOOOOOOOOO...Kelsey......come back!!! Don't leave yet!!! Awwwww...JUST missed her...OH well...catch up with her later, I guess...swan
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Thanks, Mari...I appreciate your words...swan
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posies 'cause of your words!!! YOU live BY THE SEA & I painted a seascape in YOUR mind?!? Oh wow, Sir!!! Thank you, very much! Now THAT'S a compliment!!!... ...Thank YOU for sharing THAT with ME!!!...how wonderful...(I lovelovelove the sea...sigh)...swan aww, shucks...
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Thanks for reading!...from North Side, Penn Square area...hell! if you lived in MWC, you know what I do in tornado season!!! Big Time!!!...lol...I'm in the big permanent swath on the other side!!! (Didja know, I looked at 100-yr. history; these 3 sections have ALWAYS gotten hit hard, from day one...yet we still keep building there...I don't mean the entire towns, I mean certain lines running thru that are an apparent 'tornado magnet'!!!...OMG!!!...Last year, it was as bad as the Big One in May a few yrs. back...my sweetheart wanted me to get in the closet & my cat, 1st time ever, dove under the dresser! I got so mad!!! I absolutely REFUSED to be moved! I told him I'd lived in KS/OK all my life; seen 'em, never been in one & I WILL NOT BE IN ONE NOW!!! Well, everyone on both sides of us lost power as it skipped over our heads...but not us...we still had power...he looked at me kinda strangely (but, not really) & said, 'Well, if Faith can move mountains, guess it can move tornados too'...I guess so.. ...thanks for the visit! & the memories (good of him, bad of tornado!)...swan
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Oh, and swanee... you are also wonderful, beautiful, marvelous, exceptional, amazing, magnificent, mind-boggling, fantastic, grand, splendid, superb, outstanding, sensational, impressive, exquisite, astonishing, astounding, stupendous, spectacular, incredible, fabulous, phenomenal, extraordinary, and of course, very special... and yes, I mean every single one of those!!! (the words can also apply to any of your poetry, especially this one) Love ya, swan!!!
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Very soothing and pleasant poem! I just love everything about the sea, the smell, the sound, the color and to feel the ondualtion of the waves. I can spend hours watching the its water kissing the sand and going back to the ocean.
Very nice and well written poem, the structure is beautiful too!
Hugs,
Mari
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Wow, go swanee!! YOU ARE AWESOME!!!!! (I'm evil and ornery, so I'll stop here) bye!!!
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Beautiful
Hi,
This was absolutely wonderful. I have lived by the beach for many years, in New Jersey, and here in Florida (I live in Saint Petersburg between the Gulf of Mexico and Tampa Bay ) I can totally relate to your beautiful words. There is so much beauty in the ocean. The sounds of the waves, the gulls...Your words paint a beautiful seascape in my mind. Thank you for sharing this with me.
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beautifully written
this is really a lovely sentiment to the "FAB" ocean.....I really liked this....."Its sweetness, lathers the foam..."....WOW!!!! excellent!!!!.......This is totally "off" the subject, but I noticed in your comments that you live in Oklahoma.......I used to live in Oklahoma city, and also Mid-West City......what part are you from?........ ~~~~~~~~~~Stephanie~~~~~~~~~~~
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You are sweet, very kind.. ...and, you have impeccable taste!!!... ...sorry...sleep deprived as always (good excuse as any for bizarre, twisted humor!) or, as Ophelie's motto says, 'I don't do drugs, so what's MY excuse?' ...LOL...thanks, y'all...appreciate the funnies tonight & the response to my humble (uh huh!) efforts with this piece...'twas fun, all around...swan
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I heard dat! I'm in Oklahoma!!! lol...go figure...Thanks for the response, Lady...always a pleasure doin' bidness wit ya! lol...oh, REM...where are ya when I needs ya SO!!! ...swan
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Thanks, Scott...I unabashedly IM'd the info to some people, and featured it (oh, for about 10 minutes! Not many points to spend!)...I was pleased & wanted others to see it & comment...it was a pleasure...thanks, Scott!...swan
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and i value your talent
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argh now I wanna go surfing. kinda hard to do when you're in Illinois lol.
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You seem to be getting a lot of good response on this one (deservedly so). I like the way the lines mimic the movement of the sea. Really great imagery in this, Nice work, Wanda!!!
Scott
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Thanks for your time & words, Freda...I was rather pleased with how it turned out...swan
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hey, my friend, this is really lovely..the beautiful words and sentiments flow perfectly on the background you have chosen...very good/freda
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Thank you...thought YOU might like...swan
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Thank you Liz, for your time & words...I value them, which is WHY I sent you the link...swan
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!!! (for your upcoming birdy day***HAPPYHAPPY***) I'M GONNA GET TO YOU YET, SON!!! Change your mind about things...point out a few 'for certains'...I'm chipping away at the 'ice' (joking)...I WILL convert you to MY cause...HOPE...I still INSIST/SING OUT that Love is all about SHARING, not based on give & take (i.e., 'greed')...at least, in MY experience, this is what the best relationships are based upon...BEST FRIENDS & LOVERS...caring/providing for each other's wants/needs/dreams/hopes...Thanks, Sir, for the visit...I appreciate your time & words (& yes, your 'humor' as well!!!) I do SO enjoy playing with da big kids!!!...swan
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Thanks for kind words, Sir, as always...I have always adored the ocean & all that thrives within (well, except for the critters that would consume! lol)...will be to visit your poem, as well, asap...be well, Sir...Thank you, Moses...swan
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Interesting, metaphorically and emotionally. The turbulence of love/relationships. The form of this poem works--the ebb and tide thing. I still think all relationships are based on greed, but this almost makes me want to give my life to altruistic aims. Very nicely done.
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