I held a broken mirror to your face
But you did not recognize the distorted view
Nor the offer to clear the image by grace.
Not liking the image you saw
You hurled anger and insults
Because the view made your heart gnaw.
Now I hang stabbed, pierced and bleeding
Because you did not recognize
The grace you were needing.
Author notes
My feelings about a week ago, but the poem parallels someone else's story.
Written July 22nd, 2004
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Good golly, this was intense. Your message really rings quite clear hear, or at least it does from my own perspective. Most people don’t like to look at their own “ugly” image that others seem to see. I know I don’t like to be reminded that there are days I am not all that nice to people. But, this goes beyond those depths, and then some. Nicely written.
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I agree with Pozo in that you have written about a very complex topic. I enjoyed your write and also wanted to let you know that I felt that your third and final tercet finished your poem on a very strong note. Bravo!
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Quite a deep write which I liked a lot
I thought it was quite sad and very deep, a little painful. Great powerful write
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this was really a great poem. i see the spirituality and faith that you hold so dear to your heart. fantastic and inspired write, great job. take care, now
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hummmmmm this is a great poem, different and i'm not sure i understand it but it is a great poem, the flow is wonderful and its very creative, great job again, keep it up!!!!!!
----hannah
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I love this write.. the poem can interpret a lot of things, like "blue oblivion" commented above, or things like your inner self etc.
"I held a broken mirror to your face
But you did not recognize the distorted view
Nor the offer to clear the image by grace."
Very effective first lines. Take care, Kate
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Thanks for reading, for understanding and for the comment.
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wow. I do see the parallel here between your personal experience, but also that of Christ, His love, and our blindness to it.
I love the way you wrote this. very nice expression.
~ Lea (formerly Ophelie)
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