Life's Metaphor
Is life a party?
A pursuit of delight?
Enjoy all you can
Anything to excite?
Is life a race to win?
Is it all about speed?
Feeling the rush
To get what you need?
Is life a marathon race?
Work and train?
Endurance is what counts?
Is that how you gain?
Is life a battle to fight?
Does the strongest win?
Must you struggle
To defeat without and within?
No, life is training ground
Building the character and soul
For the divine, eternal,
Purposeful goal.
No, life is entrusted to us
All we have and all we share
Are given only briefly
Into our management and care.
No, life is our assignment
Given to us temporarily.
A breath, a whisper here
Then gone momentarily.
We are created in love.
We are created by love.
We are created for love.
We are created to love.
With a purpose
LOVE
Author notes
This is inspired by The Purpose Driven Life by Rick Warren.
Written August 5th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Life of Inspiration by calentice.
600 points, ended August 28, 2005, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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a great poem
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Wow this was powerful I love your ending of descibing live compleatly around love. you've got great imagry there. ~calentice~
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good job
Never read it, but I like the poem. Actually, I love the poem. It's a great job. It's also so totally unlike anything I've ever read of yours that I'm rather stunned -- not speechless, of course, but stunned. -
Nice....you hit it right on! I love that book by the way! I'm glad to have read this...it's chalk full of wisdom and I like to be reminded of why I'm here. I must do that daily, lest I get caught up in the whirlwind of the temporary!! Thank you!
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I feel bad. I gave you the wrong link
Sorry. I'm glad you liked this one though. The other in this contest is of the 'metaphor style' we've discussed.
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wow, this flows perfectly, and is a very uplifting write. Pople will love this. It really takes the sting out of life! Good for young people, but I think older people who are trapped by circumstances would have a much harder time with this. Very nice write!
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I s life a gamble? The first part of this Metaphor got me thinking. . . Not really so much a game as it is a gamble. . . But then you flipped it and put it on us and the will we are to fulfill. And I suppose if we consider who put us here, in a lot of ways, yea by love to love.
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I absolutly love this poem. It flowed great and was written beautifuly. I love the end as well. Well good luck in the contest and great job. Keep writing. Late.~Nikki
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i liked this one so far the most out of all the secrets that have been told, because i too believe that love is the secret that everyone should find be that by another person, a pet, or god love it really what makes the world work. great job! and best of luck even though i dont think that you will need it
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A BEAUTIFUL POEM
This was simply beautiful and so true. I love the stanza that begins with, No, life is entrusted to us. I really enjoyed reading this poem. It was a wonderful way to start my day. Thank you so much for taking the time to comment on my poem Rainbows. Take care.
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yeah, that may have been wheat through me, I always use meater and rhyme so it's weird for me to see one without the other....but that's just style conflix... you won't be docked for that cause I really liked what you had to say.
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Meter? What meter? There was no meter - at least not on purpose
Perhaps with meter in might be better or at least the rhyme wouldn't seem so force
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Excellent message, excellent write all-round! (based on an excellent book
) I used to use a style just like yours, but it seemed so...unpersonalized. If you use this style most often, it might explain why you didn't quite enjoy my style. My mind thinks choppily, so I write choppily...sometimes, haha. My best portrayal of that style is probably "Tener Consensio". Those words mean Soft Melody in Latin (which I take in school). I'd like to read it and say what you think! (with advice of course). It'd be much appreciated, you do seem to have more experience than I, so rub some off on me! haha.
in Christ and God bless,
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hey you're welcome! this is a great poem, i'm glad i could help!
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Thank You. I wrote it late at night and didn't notice that. I've changed it. I appreciate you catching that.
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Very well done
mephleg
I love how it ends in love, this is very well done. The ryhm seemed a little forced and meater could use a hand, but that all about practice, I think you have done a great job and go fig. I love it. Thanks for being a part of my humble contest. Best of luck to you. -
oooh i really like this one! the end was kind of a surprise, and a good one! you used 'temporarily' twice like 2 lines apart, which sorta threw off the rhythm, but other than that this poem was a really awesome read, good luck!
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