I am a soldier at war
Waging your battle
Shedding my blood
For your life and freedom
Dying
I am a solid door
Driven through
Beside a velvet opening
Soft and easy
Selecting
I am a jewel you adore
Released to another
Yielded freely
Never seen again
Giving
I am a dance floor
Pounded by feet
Vibrating with music
Scratched and marred
Celebrating
I am iron ore
Solid and strong
Bendable under fire
Durable over time
Enduring
A soldier fights to pass through difficult doors.
A jewel given to another offers reason for both to dance.
These acts require an iron will.
Love is Sacrifice.
Love is Choice.
Love is Selfless.
Love is Joyful.
Love remains.
Author notes
Agape (ah-gah-pey) is Greek for unconditional love. It is used in the New Testament for God's love.
To read this poem once is to do it injustice. It is meant to be rich with metaphor.
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For the contest I read
All Things will Die
by Alfred Lord Tennyson (one of my favorite poets)
Written September 4th, 2004
In a list
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A contest entry
- The meaning of Unconditional Love by tigeray.
300 points, ended September 11, 2004, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Bravo!
I stopped by to read the form you created. This is beautiful, flowing and thought provoking. The structure is original and quite frankly I think it’s wonderful. You should submit it to be listed at shadowpoetry.com in the created forms section so it gets some notoriety. This statement of faith that you employ in your work is bold and wonderful. My suggestion for this poem is to put the pronunciation of ‘agape’ in the AN, most people don’t know the word and may see it as being pronounced as the same spelling meaning ‘mouth hung open’.
Love,
Amera♥
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excellent~
Just beautiful
I loved how you incorporated all the metaphors in this poem
Then explained them in your author's comments
Glad to see your also entering contest
Best of luck on getting a trophy for this one...it is a winner in my book
Love n hugs
Susan~~~
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Okay, after trying to write in this chalanging form, I can now truly appreciate the effort it took to tie all these metaphores together, and rhyme the last word of each stanza. This is super hard to do! Obvioulsy, since you are the creator of this form, your piece is perfect.
Excellent development throughout, with a summery that brings it all together (if the reader hasn't figured it all out by now). Now, lets hope, by reading your examples, that I can even remotely come close to this poem.
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Wow, this is so good! I don't know if I could ever come up with something so artistic! It's beautiful! (And I bookmarked the explanation of your form!
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Exquisite
Thank you for entering our contest. The poetry is wonderful, the form outstanding. The inner meaning hidden so covertly in this poem is astounding. A wonderful and thought provoking meaning for unconditional love.
Using the Greek word “Agape” for the title of your poem shows your knowledge and wisdom.
Being the third to enter our contest a special prize awaits you!!!!
Good luck in the contest.
Love from India - Joel - and from MI - Theresa -
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Perfect description of all that is unconditional with a good ending that outlines all it should be ( but often isn't). I like the metaphors used , adds to the poem as a whole.
Special
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A wonderful poem, I liked your description and imagery a lot although I only read it twice so there's still things left to ponder I liked the way you mixed the images in this A great title to
Good luck in the contest
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I just love this! The First five stanzas here give the reader a rich image filled foundation- five different examples of selfless love. The final two stanzas tie it al together, the first here more vivid and beautiful pictures and the last a melodic, "completion stanza" if you will. The ending line is outstanding, giving the "punch" the poem requires. This is an unusual, but lovely form. Really, really great poem!
Good Lord this is going to be sooooo hard to decide!
Awesome stuff!
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I dont think its the metaphors that make this peice special, those are easy enough to understand. I think that the whole concept and idea's about unconditional love that make this peice stand out. Nice work
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I call the style "Progressive Metaphor." There are five metaphors. Five stanza progressively explain the metaphors. The next 3 lines join the metaphors giving further explanations. The last five lines explain the metaphors even more. BUT not all is explained. The progressive explanations are meant to be rich in metaphor too.
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I felt as if you played out all your metaphors, not really leaving anything for the reader to ponder.
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