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~ It Is Raining..

...It is raining so hard on me..
I cannot see my once destined way..
I am wet with storms of eternity..
Chained in this for ever one day..

...It is raining so hard on me..
I am deserted on the path I walk..
I am heavy with streams of tears..
In this lonely crowd of growing stark..

...It is raining so hard on me..
Ever since I walked out of that door..
Lost and lonely on this familiar path..
Not even sure of who I was anymore..

~ * ~

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Written September 13th, 2004

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  • Autumn Whisper
    August 30, 2005
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    oh sorry, heres an applaud, it was really good, here you go...

  • Autumn Whisper
    August 30, 2005
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    nice poem Lonely and i absolutely possilutely love the background its awesome. say, dyu like funny poetry, coz ive got a contest running at the moment, here are the details...
    CALLED: l.m.a.o. ABOUT: humour WANT: funny poems LIKE: anything of that sort WOULD: really appreciate it if you entered.
    good luck if you do and if not, maybe next time eh?
    best wishes
    -Crazy-Poet-4-Eva- (soon to be Shimmering River)

  • meangirl101
    November 19, 2004
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    wow uur a very talented writer !!!

  • ICaughtFire
    September 20, 2004
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    Great

    I can't even put into words what I want to say about this. It's wonderful. I love rain and I was hooked when I saw the background. The background is awesome. You did a great job on this piece and I look forward to reading others of yours.

  • Lonely
    September 19, 2004
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    Thank you for this comment Lyrical Soul... I found this background I guess from a website of backgrounds... dont remember which website thanks again

  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    September 19, 2004
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    Ah, this is very well written and where did you find such a wonderful background? Well done!

  • finding myself 84
    September 18, 2004
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    Someone above stated that the background really enhanced your words and I couldn't agree more. You've done a wonderful job with this piece. Thanks for sharing. Sonya

  • cuteness
    September 14, 2004
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    i can see that i'm not the only one that loves this!!! totally awesome background chick...... and totally awesome poem...... it made me feel really lonely but then i kinda figured that i am lonely... hehe....... awesome write girl.... the always r... sorry i havent read much....... i'm not good with stuff like that... hehe....
    Later, Linzui
  • DistantMemory
    September 14, 2004
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    Good job!! I liked it and the background suits it really well and this is coming from someone who LOVES rain, so thats saying something.

  • Empathy-eyes
    September 14, 2004
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    Excellent piece, although very sad. Indeed it is always raining so hard on me, not only due to this damn weather in England! Lol! I felt your pain and lonliness in this one. It's nice to vent some feelings. Well done and keep up the great work Take care, Kate

    p.s. Excellent background and picture. It really flowed well with the poem.
  • Willow
    September 14, 2004
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    Excellent, truely superb work from you sis. Very haunting and lonely. Just another masterpiece. I think this may take the place of Winters Dream as my fav poem of yours. I love love love this.

    ~Willow~

  • The Eros
    September 14, 2004
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    darn wet...lol

    now first things first ....where you got the koool background yaar ...you know it really does the trick in enhancing the picture made by your words! beautiful work and eye catching background ..lo'ove it

  • mina nagi gold member
    September 14, 2004
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    This is another masterpiece of yours, and good selection of backdrop...the picture too blends in nicely with your words...
    mina

  • poeticweaver gold member
    September 13, 2004
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    Great Poem!

    Wonderfully written sweet soul, how I've missed you, and I'm glad I stopped by to read this deep piece of poetry that flows from the heart within you, and how wonderfully expressed it is as well...You're getting really good my dear friend, and I so can relate, and enjoyed reading this piece! You keep up the great works, and it's nice penning these thoughts down, and I think that's where the healing begins for me, it's all poetry!

    Much love sweetie! 's

    -Timothy The Poetic Weaver~

  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    September 13, 2004
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    It is always raining on me...the background just reminded me that I need to grab my umbrella, lol. I feel the despair here...I cried what seemed endlessly earlier today. Sometimes it seems like you're all alone in a spiral of depression and those outside of you (who, mind you, have never been afflicted) never understand your pain. I adore this piece...very smooth, with a touch of sparkle despite the anguish. Well done, mon cherie!

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora
  • BluexxEyes19
    September 13, 2004
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    I love this! You may want to change the color of the words because it's hard to see....But no more of that....Great job and you conveyed your emotions so well throughout this piece!
    Love, Megan
  • Betty Davis eyes
    September 13, 2004
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    I just loved this! I saw 'raining' and I just knew I had to read it because I love anything associated with storms. This poem was great. One of my favorites. The background and picture are awesome! You expressed the darkness and loneliness of walking down the path very convincingly. Wonderful!
  • allalone04
    September 13, 2004
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    i feel the despair

    wow,how'd ya do that background?bravo! I realy like this poem and I'll prove it by applauding you 'cause I'm not that good with words!
  • CradleofManson
    September 13, 2004
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    ya defentily this made me feel alone and sad..i loved it. the back ground is also awesome.

  • September 13, 2004
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    I like this a lot, the background kind of made me dizzy.. lol. I like the discription you put in it, being soaking wet scared and alone is a good comparison to the feeling you are conveying. keep it up
    PLUR
  • Nickie
    September 13, 2004
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    I love how you've described being lost on your path in different ways, it really adds to the poem. Wonderful write
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