I carry my cross
on the back of my womanhood
with lessons lost
and wisdom learned
It gets to be
a heavy load
Laden with salt and sack-clothed ashen
faces, that know nothing
of the pain, I've known
How my heart ripped open
beating before my eyes
eclipsed with drug-induced opiate relief
Watching Q-waves wander and lose
their way, to my heart
it beats in many rhythms
Sound-bites and pulsating hormonal
head-rushes, that carry my cross
to that rock
Between my womanhood
and a hard place
Author notes
hmmm.. ... don't know why.. 
Written September 15th, 2004
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Damn you man!!! you say the most spectacalur things.. that make me re-read my own stuff and go.. yeah.. for gawdddd's sake.. that's what I was saying in my head..
Thankie hun..
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Everlasting I strike the break of my back and tender the sides of my interest.
Tieing long strands of my hair to decorate the page, I can see so many sides to the hurt, the woe, the meaty left hand breaking down on those who cannot fight back.
I get women on porches drinking oranges and biting lemonade, their pistols lined to the male fixture waiting to beat out the worm from inside the shell. The female design, the rights from which they have been ripped can only be theirs because they want them and if they have to the spirit to forge they shall continue and finally succeed.
- James
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thankyou Ashley.. glad you enjoyed it
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Briliant,
I'm found to be quite speechless, this was a beautiful write.
so much depth and emotion,
you Have quite the intriguing talent, this was just pure briliance
and I absolutly loved it.
I can't wait to read more, keep up the great work.
lots of love
~Ashley
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this is somehow very deep and yet..i can not fathom a meaning or something that makes me relate to just understand why i think like this... its definately a "jedi" poem ( a poem that is really mysterious without any reason you can fathom why it is so)
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Thankyou Sonia.. sometimes.. things just pop out and wham!! I write it.. as always.. thankyou for the great comment
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I suppose some things just have to be written - not always understanding their source Gill. Buried too deep perhaps. I loved this - pulled at the ole heartstrings , which separates great poetry from the mediocre. Incredible emotion. Your writing is so versatile - one day something naughty about 'Jack' - and the next , something exposed from the chambers - that dark place deep down. Loved it
~ Sonia ~ X -
This write just evoked pools of emotion
Only us Nurses or those in medical field would know about Q waves and I like how you blended it in, with the many rythmns
Great emotionn in this write sis
Love ya
Your sis
Susan~~~
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To be akin to Maya is an honour as she is one of my all time favourites... and I love And Still I Rise
thanks hun.. really appreciate the commment
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nice, reminds me of Maya Angelou (is that right, I read her poetry ages ago).
"just because I have diamonds
at the meeting of my thighs
and still like dust I'll rise"
damn that must be horrible wrong since the rhyme in the poem was abcb and I made it abb
well it was something like that anyway (Maya Angelou- Still I Rise). Awesome write this,
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WOW!! THis was great I am going ot book mark this for sure, it's awesome!
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This poem is a reconceptualization on why we guys have to listen without budding into a dialouge with women about your space, and how we should respect the mutuality of our existance...I feel...I could be wrrooonnnggg...Ain't the first time...
Great write though!
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Okay baby girl.. I hear you... I'll be good
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I love this poem Gill.... It's written with much heart and contrary to it's recent behavior it's a strong one
I believe CoyoteMoon has the best advice, and you better listen to her... lol.
love ya
jenn -
womanhood is both a burden and a blessing. we wear many hats...but rarely do we get to be just us...and we worry more for others than for ourselves. Take time for youself hun...live, love and laugh. It feels selfish, i know...but its not. You need it...and you deserve it.
Love you Gilly
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I think the trick to this one is to avoid reading too deeply into it. Rather, it appears the best method is to sit and let the ripples spread, then listen to what they're saying to you, as they touch the shores of one's consciousness. Very beautiful, very meaningful. Maya Angelou would be proud.
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Its hard being a woman. We must be master of all things. Wonderful write with intese impact.
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that was so interesting... i really liked it though, never read something like that before, but you made it make sense, and flow... great job!
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WOw it really seems like you are struggling to find answers with this piece. you expressed your confusion beautifully. I think at some point every woman goes through that, I'm sorry about your heart attack, I hope you are doing better. And the part eclipsed with drug-induced opiate relief really stuck out to me, this was really great nurse.
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Excellent
This expresses many emotions to me, one of sadness, one of anger of weakness in one'self and hope that things will get to be a lighter load. Beautifully written and expressed with a real passion.I wish you well
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Yes you may be thinking still a little girl not even a woman but I as a young female, a woman have gone through alot I somewhat know what you are feeling well this is a beautiful poem with a meaning keep up the great work!
MaRyJaNe -
TRUEWOMANHOOD
The pain of this world attacks particularly women and this poem show that well..the insight ..because woman is the mother of life..this may explain it..but it also says that womanhood is precious and should be protected and held high..Great Poem -
heheheh... rofl.. whatever you see Emi is cool..
But it's sort of womanhood and me.. and when I had my heart attack.. and things.. that surround my recovery
But as always thanks for the great comment hun
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this is... odd... I dunno how deep this goes... it's like... you're quest for remaining a virgin until you're married and you have your heart ripped out by guys you thought loved you but only wanted you for your "womanhood"... I think that's what it's saying but right now I'm not quite sure. A great write anyways Gilly
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