When the stage is quiet & dark,
when fragrant bouquets have died,
just know I was here in shadows ~
I bowed my head & cried.
Your performance was so grand, dear one ~
the audience was in awe ~
though, when no one was looking,
I turned around & saw.
You kissed the sky ~ it kissed you back ~
you knelt upon the earth ~
you stretched your arms toward the stars
& discovered your rebirth.
Your show was Standing Room Only,
so I waited in the wing ~
but then, instead of whispering,
you began to sing.
The crowd hung on your every word ~
they listened for every breath ~
& then, when you were finished,
I died a little death...
~ October 18, 2004
2:00 a.m.
Author notes
I don't have a clue where this one came from...it just did...go figure!!! "Kissed the sky"...maybe I was channeling Jimi Hendrix?!? LOL
Written October 19th, 2004
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Thanks, Marissa Rae...I'm glad you liked it...I enjoyed writing this one...I don't write very many rhymes, mostly free verse...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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This is a great write.
i really enjoyed reading it.
*claps* BRAVO
good write,
i liked it,
keep it up.
good luck in my contest!
~Midnite rae
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{bows lithely & reaches out a hand to help you right back up} 
Thanks, Rob...but stand on your feet, Man...your writing is amazing... Wanda
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Yeah, what they said. I'll just clap, bow deeply from the waist, and quietly slink away to go lay by my dish.
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"You kissed the sky ~ it kissed you back ~" THAT was great...You can really get the sense of what you're talking about here.
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How about 'discovered your new birth'??? Would that work better??? Thanks for your in~depth study today, my Friend...it means a lot to me that you'd take the Time...as I do know how very Precious it is...
♥ 
Wanda
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Hello, Sir...Thanks for your kind words...the shadows came in from being on the sidelines, watching the performance as it was unveiled...(I usually lean more towards Light) You asked, 'who?' I don't know, really...the poem just came to me, really, when I was practicing rhymes again...I usually do free~verse...I kinda thought of the song by The Carpenters, 'Superstar'...& memories of watching people in concert...not one specific artist or group, though...thanks for visiting, Sir...I appreciate your Time...be well, Poet!!! Wanda
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Very nice and full of emotion. Caters to my dark side. Your personification of Shadows and not sky intrigues me. Bravo!
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Awww, Vic!!! Not every type...haven't written any novels!!! Although, some of my letters qualify as such!!! Thanks, my Friend...be well...TTYL!!! 
Wanda
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wow!!! SEE YOUR GOOD AT EVERY TYPE OF WRITTING! lol. i think i found the type of writting im good at too:-D i loved this peice. wow *applauds*
well ill ttul...
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shrieks like a lil' girl ~ 'eek!!!'
roflmao I'm not laughing at ya, Sweetheart, but at myself...& your words have delighted me beyond measure!!! THANK YOU!!! THANK YOU!!! THANK YOU!!! Only your perception, eh?!? I'll take YOURS over any other critics, anytime!!!
& not just cause ya love me so often & so well, either!!! LOL Thanks, Sweetheart...ya don't know what you've done for me...especially this evening...I'm going to post a bunch of sad ones I wrote earlier...about my brother...5 in less than an hour...but they're kinda short...don't know how soon I'll be able to get them done, though...may have to go offline again in awhile if Donna's son wants the PC...I'm a PC hog!!! hehehe 
But, because of your gracious, loving words this evening, I won't be quite as sad when I do post them... Thank you, Diane...you're so wunnerful!!! TTYL!!! Wanda
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Okay you wanted my opinion.
Its a funny thing how we see things in different ways and thank goodness we do. But how it felt to me was I was the watcher and you are the "Superstar"
You kiss the sky every time you write. Yes the audience hangs on your every word. Just look at me for example. I can move mountains when I read your poems.
And if there was no more NIGHT HOPE poems, I definitely would experience a little death.
There you have it. Of course its only my perception, but its all mine.
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That works for me, Sir Michael!!! bows lithely Thank you kindly...glad you liked it!!! 'Twas a bit different for me to have written...I don't rhyme very often!!! TTYL, my Friend... Wanda
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Can't say much more than has already been said. Just wanted you to know, I thoroughly enjoyed your poem.
Sir Michael -
Now that is high praise, indeed, Suh!!! But, em...is it poetry??? hehehe...by your standards??? I know it rhymes...the meter's off...but have I moved out of your prose category yet??? LOL So good to see ya back in our neck of the woods, my Friend...your absence was duly noted, by many!!! Shucks...I'm sitting here grinnin' like a fool, 'cause em thinks it's good!!! I felt ya pat me on the back, too!!! Thanks, my intelligent, discerning Friend...your praise is wondrous to this ol' Poet's Heart... Wanda
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Absolutely Excellent......... !
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Heyah, Rosa!!! How you doin'?!? LOL Good to see ya in my neighborhood...thanks for the glowing review, my Friend... Wanda
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Wow!!! High praise, indeed!!! Thanks for your Time...be well, Poet!!! Wanda
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Cracked ya up, did I?!? Good!!! LOL Glad ya enjoyed yourself, Robin...Thanks for dropping in!!! TTYL... Wanda
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Breath taking
This is just beautiful, loved that part about kissing the sky! You have a masterpiece here my dear POET FRIEND
Much love to you
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This was absolutely wonderful. I felt so much through the whole piece. I was happy, sad, excited, and overwhelmed. Beautiful job.
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I was like all star struck and amazed and stuff til I read your author comments...then broke down giggling hysterically!! Channelling Jimi Hendrix? Beautiful write Wanda.
~Lyrical
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Whoa, Jamie!!! hehehe Thanks for the Kleig~lit review!!!
I almost put eek!!! {runs & hides}...
but I decided you were so kind, I oughta stick around...LOL Thanks, my Friend...very glad you enjoyed it so much!!! Be well, Quasar... Wanda
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Thanks for the critique, VS...I did go back & revise it a bit...added & deleted a word or two here & there...I agree; there were too many "&'s"...glad you liked the poem in spite of the redundancy...I appreciate your candor & helpfulness...Be well, Poet!!! Wanda
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You got it!!! Thanks for your Time, Poet...I appreciate you!!! Wanda
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ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL!!
whoa, Wanda!!! now THIS is some absolutely beautiful poetry~! and you can sure tell by all the clapping and applauding going on here - and I don't mean in the poem! I'm in agreement with the soul who said you've got Emily D's DNA - THIS is soooo great, every bit of it. For someone who was standing in the shadows, your performance here should have been center stage and under the bright lights.....an exquisite poem indeed. I truly love it, my friend. take care
Jamie
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Well, wherever this came from you should tap into it more often because this was a grand piece of work. I enjoyed it..my favorite lines were,
"& I waited in the wing ~
& then, instead of whispering,
you began to sing."
my only suggestion is that you get rid of all the 'ands'. Try, "and I waited in the wing
then, instead of whispering,
you began to sing."
There really is no need for excessive use of the word and. I think it'll make your poem even better, but it's your artwork, do what you will with it. Keep up the good work,
Sinceritamente,
Venomous Scorpio
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I thought this poem was great. It's like holding someone, like your idol, up on a pedestal and whenever they do something, you go into shock, you die a little death. lol
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Hello, my Daisey Friend...how are ya, Freda??? Great to see your name on my poem...thanks for visiting!!! Hope all is well with you...all is with me, or getting there, anyway..
TTYL, my Friend...Be well!!! Wanda
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You're very sweet, Laura...thanks for your Time...be well, Poet...& if ya do write that poem, IM the title, will ya??? LOL I'd like to read it!!! Be well, Poet!!! Wanda
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Thanks, Sweetheart!!! LOL Ya made me smile!!! Wanda
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BonnieQ!!! Are ya ok, my Friend? Have you been in an accident? Angeleyes wrote an emotionally~charged poem for you & said you'd been in an accident! Let me know ASAP, ok? I've been worried about you!!! Thanks for the comments, my Friend...I appreciate your beautemous thoughts, but, to heck with my poem!!! Are you ok??? I sure Hope so... Wanda
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This is fantastic Wanda! I realize you "don't know where this came from" but it easily could describe Christ, who did so much for us while on His stage: even dying for us. It could describe the deep love we might feel for someone close, who then dies and leaves us behind.
Obviously, your talent radiates here; for you have penned a poem with which no one could fail to identify. Now, that particular feat is the mark of a true master of the craft.
Love and hugs, BonnieQ
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Wanda what a beautiful piece, as always you touch the strings in my heart and make me "feel" and that is a good thing...bravo...
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This piece is very well written again another deep thought, everyone has deep thoughts today lol. Maybe after bible study I will put in a deep thought and blow everyone away. GOD BLESS YOU AND TAKE CARE OF YOURSELF, Another great writting by a special person. LAURA
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Beautiful beyond words!
Oh Wanda this is simply beautiful and dare I say it brought back some memories I had long forgotten. you have such a wonderful way with words.
Everything about this wonderful piece of poetry is beautiful, and perfect I loved each and every word.
Take care because I care
Elaine
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'died a LITTLE death', Jen...as in 'swooned', 'nearly fainted', etc. LOL GF, ya need some shut~eye!!! I know what sleep deprivation will do to ya...I'm a professional!!! Professional insomniac, that is...aren't ya glad I clarified that?!? hehehe
Glad ya liked it, my Friend...it's been waiting for a favorable glance from you...LOL TTYL, Jen...now get some sleep!!! Wanda
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W00t MORE RHYME!!! hehe. i liked it a lot!!! i loved the point of view throughout the poem, and of course the smooth flow!!! maybe i missed something..or im too drugged up with my sinus medication..that i didnt get the last line
"The crowd hung on your every word ~
they listened for every breath ~
& then, when you were finished,
I died a little death..."
you died?!! NO!! hehe. i probably missed something though..lol
great job..now im off to check out your alliteration one
Jen
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Heyah, Jenp!!! Good to see ya, my Friend...glad you liked my poem...kinda different for me to have done...I appreciate ya!!! Wanda
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Beautiful poem! I loved it, the whole stlye of it all was very interesting. And the ending really added to it
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Fantasmal!?! Wow, my Friend...awesome word...hehehe I made up a good one...magwonderlous...a combination of magnificent, wonderful & marvelous...therein lies your commetary!!! LOL Thanks, Sweetheart...appreciate ya!!! See ya!!! Wanda
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this was great...loved the rhyme...i agree with the above-very singy songy (well that wasn't their exact words...but ya know lol) anywho.........fantasmal girl blessed be.
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hehehe Oh, Nic...you're too kind, my Friend!!! It did require some effort on my part!!! LOL It definitely wasn't effortless!!! But, it seemed to come outta nowhere...I dunno...kinda strange...but I like it when the Muse just grabs the pen & says, 'Move over, GF!!! Lemmee at it!!! hehehe Thanks for visiting, Sweetheart...you're very generous...I like that in a reader!!! LOL TTYL, my Friend... Wanda
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Wonderful words
Wow....all my words have left me to circle somewhere amongst the stars! This is sooo beautiful, Wanda - one of the best poems from your pen that I have read. For this I give you a standing ovation - encore encore!
I loved the rhyme (hey, you are good, girl and indeed it is effortless rhymes before my eyes you whirl)!! This poem has a singing quality about it - oh, so lyrical and moving. Wonderful!
~ Nicolette
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Thanks, nika...a song?!? Hmmmm...interesting concept there...hehehe Too bad I can't sing, eh? Oh, I can, I just choose to be kind & only sing to my dog & cat...the cat starts swayin' & the dog's tail thumps like a bass drum...hehehe...Thanks for dropping in, my Friend...Be well!!! Wanda
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bows lithely Why, Thank you, Suh!!! hehehe...Hello, my Friend...thanks for dropping in... Wanda
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So I've suspected for lo, these many years!!! Thanks, Acadia...I appreciate your Time... Wanda
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Thanks, Kate!!! I appreciate your sentiments...but hey!!! Ya didn't say who the singer was that you've admired for so long...ah, c'mon ~ tell me please?!? I'm curious about it now...& although I did admire Jimi, there are others just as worthy of the adulation...Clapton, for instance...& many more...although 'Foxy Lady' was something my ex would sing to me...sigh ...it became the anthem of an entire generation, I think!!! Be well, Kate... Wanda
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haha!!! i dont think jimi would mind too much and this is cool.. it feels like another side to an emerging artist... the more down-to-earth side. also makes me feel like the artist actually loved what he/she was doing... which doenst seem to be the case in today's music industry. love of music, that is. i dunno i got a very warm, hard rock live feeling from this.. makes me wish i had my guitar or piano or cuatro or SOMETHING here to play for a while lol but alas, theyre all at home
oh well. some good music will just have to do thanks for the lovely song... even if it doesnt seem like you wrote one
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Really great idea, flows well and the pictures you paint are fantastic.
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This one is diffenetly strange. But that's a good thing.
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What a beautiful piece! The words flowed in such, oh heck I can't even describe it as i'm too lost for words! This reminded me of when I went to a concert that was so very special... listening to the singer I have adored for many years. (Wish it could have been Jimi *sniffs*). Anyway, thank you for the great read!
Take care, Kate
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Thanks, Elisabeth...your comments are always so sweet & kind...I like that in a reader!!! LOL Wanda
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Oh, no!!! Not the one with Molly Shannon?!? Yikes!!! LOL Thanks for your visit, Poet...for the lovely compliments...& the horrid image now stuck in my brain...Ye Gods!!! hehehe I was kinda thinking, a minute ago, about the old song by Karen Carpenter, 'Superstar'...with the lines, 'Don't you remember you told me you loved me, baby? Said you'd be coming back this way, oh, baby...oh baby, baby, baby, oh baby...I love you...I really do...' There!!! I gave ya an earworm!!! roflmao Oh, ya know what they say 'bout paybacks!!! LOL Just pickin' on ya, kiddo...wierd mood this evening...hehehe...Thanks for your Time...& I appreciate the fit of giggles I'm havin'!!! Wanda
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Thanks, John...LOL I really don't know where it came from...I've been doing 'practice runs' on rhymes lately...a Friend (serene darkness) has remarked how much she likes them...& my poems with massive alliteration...I've been reading my books, too...poetry collections, of course!!! I'm so glad poetry isn't a drug...I'd have OD'd long ago!!! Lately, though, when I get online, everyone laughs at me & says, 'Going for your 'fix'???' Sheesh...I don't care!!! I LOVE poetry...always have, always will...& anything that can take me away from the TV has got to be good...after all, there's always a good old movie on...LOL Thanks, John...I appreciate your constant attendance & generous Spirit...Jimi woulda liked you!!! Wanda
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Wow..this was exceptional. I loved it. I loved everything about it. Great flow and format but just a grand lovely piece. I can totally relate. Wonderful job.
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I think this is really beautiful. The flow was amazing and so smooth that it couldn't be any better. The whole kissed the sky part reminds me of that movie.. i forget what it's called but it's the one where the girl goes ' SUPERSTAR! '. Lol. I love it. Awesome piece.
Love&Comfort
undisc0vered
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I think Jimi would be proud if you said this WERE his!
What a wonderful poem!
Juanito
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