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End Of The World

Sleepless nights...
Hold me tight...

Please don't let me die tonight...

Author notes

erm..yeah...short...gonna change it probably tho..yeah...its pretty pathetic at the moment
Written November 22nd, 2004

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  • BlackCherryParadise
    March 16, 2005
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    why thankyou
  • daisychainsaw
    March 14, 2005
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    Hello zoe, i will applaud you as i am in a very smiley mood((blame lex lol)) and also as i know you are bored and want applause and me being such a kind and generous person i thought i would make you happy by applauding.
    Love ya,
    jessica
    xXx
  • BlackCherryParadise
    December 22, 2004
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    Thanx, yeah, i see what you mean...actually that would've been a good line...
    Zoe

  • Charlotte-E-Nikovna
    December 17, 2004
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    if you're gonna change it i would suggest the word "fuck" like "you fucking let me die tonight@ i'm not just saying that to be potty mouthed but i have been reading through your other poems and they're all angry like "bring my punk rock back"..it needs punk rock in my honest opinion..unless you mean it as a love poem then i can equally appreciate it, it's dependant and tragic a the same time.
    reminds me of ophelia actually.
    Adreena
    xxx

  • myrataal silver member
    December 11, 2004
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    Bittersweet

    Beautifully sad, concise and to the point.

    Love keep us from dying prematurely.



    Myra
  • daisychainsaw
    November 22, 2004
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    NO not pathetic.....saying that is pathetic zoe.
    Just shutup! it is good so there!
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