Such an inspiration---
what a sensation
I get when your spell is cast;
Your eyes do not know
how they haunt my sleep,
how they shine when sleep is past.
My eyes seek and find your grace;
My mind's disjointed---out of place---
Coldly severed from Time's embrace;
Ah, fool who feels that spirits meet,
rise up together---strong, elite---
sparks combined give off needed heat.
The moon speaks softly in my ear;
whispers, "There's no need to fear
the passing of another year;
Seeds tossed casually, then left alone,
have struggled wildly, but have grown---
It is a secret I have known
and kept
and touched, in awe,
while others slept."
~ June 1980 ~
Author notes
Long ago & far away...
originally posted June 26, 2004, 11 days after I joined AP ~
www.allpoetry.com/poem/692196
This poem remains one of my favorites, largely because it is the first rhyme I ever remember writing...I also think it's fairly timeless, in that it doesn't even feel dated to me...When I wrote it, it came out as a whole piece, smoothly & without hesitation...That's relatively a rare event, especially for a rhyme...& I still believe what I wrote...
Written December 5th, 2004
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A contest entry
- 350th contest group one /finalists only by poet2angels.
475 points, ended August 26, 14 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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very cool lady.
thanks for showin' me. 
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Flawless rhyme and flow mingled with the beauty of your emotions freely expressed makes this a treasure and joy to read.
"Such an inspiration---
what a sensation
I get when your spell is cast;
Your eyes do not know
how they haunt my sleep,
how they shine when sleep is past."
Ty for entering this beautiful piece!
Lynda
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Hmmm...Too much for one to experience in one lifetime, perhaps...but I don't think there ever can be too much beauty. There is a lot of sorrow & ugliness in this world; we need all the beauty & serenity we can get to help balance the scales. Duality in all things & such. I used to have a poster of a sidewalk...a wildflower had found its way through the concrete, somehow. Tenacity. Yes. Thank you, Poet.
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Wonderful!
Seeds tossed casually, then left alone,
have struggled wildly, but have grown---
It is a secret I have known
and kept
and touched, in awe,
while others slept."
How I needed to read that! There's energy here. Hope.
Thanks, my friend...
Jin
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"sparks combined give off needed heat."
Liked this line a lot.
Thank you Wanda, you are such a sweet soul.
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Long ago & far away...
Written long ago but less far away than one might think this composition anticipates the promise that is coming to bloom with such selflessness and thus deserves recognition and unmitigated applause to one who never fails to inspire others through her openhearted sharing and empathy.
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You are far too kind, dear Scribe...but don't stop now.
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Ok your rhyme still speaks as a song, a meldoy heard as the beat falls over each word, you say first try at it well, do not stop for it is just as lovely as your free verse. Love, C
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Beautifully written. I really like this poem. Thanks for entering my contest! I wish you the best of luck!
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quite a talent to have this be your first rhymed experience.. lovely
some
day i will have to show you some of my rhyme..
m
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wonderful music here..
al
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Thank you kindly, Al.
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Lovely
A really beautiful poem with a liquid lyrical flow that is very full-bodied and abundantly lovely. The picture is really exquisite as well, I must say.
David
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Wow....you are right, this is a beautiful beautiful poem! I love how it sort of...in my eyes, anyway...works in a quasi-religious way. (Maybe because I'm reading American Gods by Neil Gaiman right now, and it raises the concept that anyone a person meets might be a god or goddess in disguise.) It did strike me as a....worshipful love poem. I loved:
"Your eyes do not know
how they haunt my sleep,
how they shine when sleep is past."
Love and light,
Jenna
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A Work of Art!!!
Of course you still believe what you wrote,
your every word speaks of truths.
and truths are never dated!
Infact, I thought this was 'new' until I saw the Author notes,
and this particular verse spoke to me 'in the now'
"My eyes seek and find your grace;
My mind's disjointed---out of place---
Coldly severed from Time's embrace;
Ah, fool who feels that spirits meet,
rise up together---strong, Elite---
sparks combined give off needed heat."
Not that long ago or far away, Poet.
I loved it!
~ Nicholas ~
P.S. Did you pose for the picture?
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Methinks, I ought to pack up....(lol)
Wow! (x2)...this is what I get for readings from you. I'm smothered in buttered refinery - far, far from the winery. This wine in me makes me see, you have got the better of me. (lol). 5 stars and my compliments to the chef(ette).
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Ahhh...
Correction: "This 'Whine'in me..."
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Lovely
Your last stanza says it all here. Lovely. Lovely. ~Pamela
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Thank you, my new Friend. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Wanda
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oooooh i see!
pretty amazing here so many themes in common... this is really something! PK -
It has a 'Victorian' feel
I enjoyed the way you combined themes such as dreaming and yearning with a strong rhyme scheme. It made gave the whole poem a feeling of 'times past' without slipping into parody.
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This is beautiful, my friend. I too often visit some of my older poems again and smile... such beauty and "innocence" here - so important to hold onto that... But yes, to still believe it. You and I are the same...we don't write fiction! All those seeds that you've tossed have grown into the most fragrant and beautiful wildflowers - and they will keep on blooming. I so loved this heartsong!
~ Nicolette
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very cool.i liked this one just as much as the other. the last twolines seemed to chop the rythm and the ryhme schemethe slightest bit, but i can see how that could be intentional. allin all a very good poem.
Good Write and God Bless
Pastoral Poet
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Proof that perfection exists
Ryhming or not, seems like you have got it all.
I am deathly honoured (if such expression exists) to have you on my favourites, and to see your elegant poems from time to time.
This - if not by someone else - I would have completely doubted that it is your style.
But given your abilities, I am only beginning to doubt that the stars are THAT far...
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I love your comments, ya know. 
Thanks, Sweetie. 
Wanda
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Once again beautiful. I will read everything you have written I swear it. I love the celestial bodies, and find the stars on this page to be a bit overwhelming. Rythmic undulations likened to the sea over seasons here.
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Sighhh...Yeahhh, a few of 'em...Thank you, Dave...Glad ya liked it...& that you have some warm fuzzies to reflect on, too...it's important...'specially for a Poet... Wanda
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Thank you, Laura...
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Thanks, Lynn...
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Excellant/romantic
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Such an inspiration---
what a sensation
I get when your spell is cast;
Your eyes do not know
how they haunt my sleep,
how they shine when sleep is past.
i love the beginning of this poem, it has very nice description and its just a nice part of the poem to read, this is more great work
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Wow!!
this is so inspirational!!
very soothing and exquisitely written.
beautiful and lovely like you!!!
lynn
p.s. i agree; this is timeless.
i like how it still evokes the same
feelings for "you" as the day you wrote it 26 years ago.
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Thank you for hosting & for your kind words, ~Ash~...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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This is a beautiful piece... I can see why it is still one of your favourites... Well done... Thankyou for entering and good luck...
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Thank you, buenaw...The last stanza has always been my favorite...& no, it's not meant to be a certain shape...Thanks for reading...G'night, Poet... Wanda
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The last stanza is the strongest. Not certain if the overall shape is to resemble some object.
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Thank you, D. ~ I'm glad you enjoyed it, my Friend...I still like this one, so many years later...somehow, it seems timeless to me... Wanda
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This is an inspirational poem. Has a lot of depth, I especially liked the last verse. Thanks for sharing this with me.
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Thank you, Erika...I'm glad you liked it...& what's with the question mark, Lady??? Of course you're beautiful...you're a Poet, ain'tcha???
G'night...sleep well... Wanda
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Even then, way back when, you had the knack and used it well - what a profound write, even in rhyme. Like to used rhyme once in a while, just to say I can. Thanks for sharing this with me. Nice to see the other side of you, even if you do sparklea lot. LOL Have a great evening. I teach tomorrow and need to get my beauty (?) sleep. have the four grandkids here too and will be hectic in the morning, getting them, and me ready. Night....
Erika -
I wrote it in June 1980...Thank you very much, FantasyGirl3603...
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Again another beautiful peice. I love your words and how you word them. This is one that could be disected and disected over again, and still you could come up with some other reasoning behind it. I dont persoanlly know how long ago you wrote this but i know what you mean when you say that it doesnt feel dated to you. THere are few peices of my own that i can look at an say, yeah that is still true in some sense. Good job again.
"Writing is a therapy all it's own. Stay strong, keep writing."
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'...And there you are sitting so pretty and serene on the moon. Have you no idea of the chaos going on in the universe behind you?!?!' Uhhh huhhh...why ya think I'm always shinin' the Light on people??? '...It is a dreamy mysterious write. There is a smile here, but a quite longing lingers behind it, subtle undercurrents carry the reader to unfamiliar territory...' You read me very well, Kind Sir... '...Do teach me to speak to the moon so she will hearken to my words and whisper in my ear - for I have questions, and she only stands before me silent!' Are ya sure you're listening closely??? She reveals the most when she appears silent, my Friend... Thank you for a wonderful comment, Presence...& for collaborating on such a great contest...I'm very pleased by your reaction to this one...Thanks for reading, my Friend... Wanda
P.S. I loved this remark: '...The stars-a-flashin' are like a cattle drive on acid. Whoopin and-a-wompin all through town!'
Indeed, Suh?!?
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I kept wanting to tell this work to hold still! lol The stars-a-flashin' are like a cattle drive on acid. Whoopin and-a-wompin all through town!
And there you are sitting so pretty and serene on the moon. Have you no idea of the chaos going on in the universe behind you?!?!
Ahem, let me compose myself here and take a peek at your literary offering... Hmmm... Yes... Uh-huh... Well!
Like a treasure, long buried deep in the jungles next to the shore... you have dug deep to find this one! Ah, and the jewels are all sparkly and shiny still! ~holds up a jewel to admire the facets-
"Ah, fool who feels that spirits meet,
rise up together---strong, Elite---
sparks combined give off needed heat."
Ah now there's a pretty thing!
"It is a secret I have known
and kept
and touched, in awe,
while others slept."
I love this sweet, gentle ending. It gives of sense of mystery to the piece that makes me feel like I should read it again because I may have missed something. (Even after the third read)
It is a dreamy mysterious write. There is a smile here, but a quite longing lingers behind it, subtle undercurrents carry the reader to unfamiliar territory. Oh, fair Poet! Do teach me to speak to the moon so she will hearken to my words and whisper in my ear - for I have questions, and she only stands before me silent!
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Thanks for reading so quickly, TW...I'm glad you liked it...it remains one of my own favorite poems & definitely my favorite rhyme, even after all this time...Thank you & Presence for hosting a great contest...Be well, Poets... Wanda
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This is an amazing piece of poetry. You have expressed yourself well. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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Thanks for reading, Jenae...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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beautifully written! i have no idea what else to say! this is amazing
luv always
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Thanks, Melpomene...I'm pleased you think so, Poet... Wanda
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your words are beautiful, the flow was great.. you are defenetly one of the best poets i have come across on AP! amazing!
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Actually, it means it was posted once before...not a parry or thrust... Thanks, montez...this was the first rhyme I can remember writing, so I'm not surprised it was all over the place...still, I like it... Wanda
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Dear Wanda,
I'm afraid I'm a bit of a conformist when it comes to verse and, while this is pretty good, the changing "form" of the rhymes in the first and last verses spoil it.
Also, in the title, should it not be riposted?
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Thanks for your kind words...this is the first rhyme I remember writing; I am still quite fond of it...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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wonderful
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Well, it doesn't go to my head...I learned humility at an early age...& if it starts to look like it is, I have people to shoot me right back down again... 'sides, if it did, I wouldn't be able to find a hat to fit, soooo... Thanks for the 10/10 verdict, Emonquente...I appreciate that...this is the first rhyme I remember writing & it's still one of my favorites...I appreciate ya, Poet... Wanda
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10/10
Hee hee, cuteness! I love this really really; and as such I'm at a loss. I only write long critiques for constructive criticism, writing too much praise goes to peoples' head and I'm bad at it lol. -
I kinda thought ya might like it, Nic...considerin' the stars in your eyes & the shine in Steve's...hehehe Love you, Woman...
♥ Vlindertjie
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The moon speaks softly in my ear;
whispers, "There's no need to fear
the passing of another year;
Seeds tossed casually, then left alone,
have struggled wildly, but have grown---
That is so beautiful, my butterfly friend - WOW!! Simply exquisite poetry - it has a wonderful singing quality about it...I really felt like humming along...this is so peaceful, almost like a lullaby (of love)!
Such an inspiration---
what a sensation
I get when your spell is cast;
Your eyes do not know
how they haunt my sleep,
how they shine when sleep is past.
Yeah..you've captured it - once again - I can so identify with each and every word of this poem. Beautiful.... thank you for these sparkling rhymes, dear one!!
~ Nicolette
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Nope...I like this one...LOL Now, if you're referring to putting it to music, perhaps??? We'll talk about it...Thanks for another cool comment...hehehe I'm happy ya liked it so much... Wanda
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Thank you, JP...I'm pleased you liked it... Wanda
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Utterly priceless...and 25 years ago???
WOW!!!!! Can I have it? The style is HAUNTINGLY familiar, grandiose, and omg- can you hear the "muse-ic?" From 1980? Incredible.
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"...Seeds tossed casually, then left alone,
have struggled wildly, but have grown---
It is a secret I have known
and kept and touched, in awe,
while others slept."
What a powerful ending to this remarkable poem!
Hugs
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Thanks for reading, Aubrey...I'm glad you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thanks for reading, fantasyfreak14...I'm glad you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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i like it alot. very well written, good rhyming and everything.
-aubrey
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Nice write. Very refreshing. The rhyming worked perfectly, without a flaw. The background and picture just enhanced it that much. I enjoyed this immensely.
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Absolutely loved it!!!
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I'm glad ya liked it, my Friend...& yeah...always a double meaning...hehehe I've always admired the strength of wildflowers...& gypsies...LOL Thanks for reading...
Wanda
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This is a wonderful piece...I love the way you play on words..like...Seeds tossed casually, then left alone,
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It's hard...I don't usually do rhymes...mostly free verse, a lot of acrostics, some haiku...this may have been the first rhyme I ever wrote...it's the first I can remember, anyway...it's still one of my favorites, 25 years later...Thanks for reading, John... Wanda
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Now the rythme in this perfect. I have long admired poets who could find rhyme and still beable to tell a story. For myself, I find it quite impossible.
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Thanks for a great comment, Crimson372...I'm glad ya enjoyed it...I don't consider rhyming to be my forte', so I enjoyed your remarks...I usually do mostly free~verse...Have a wonderful time judging!!! Wanda
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wow
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{pats ya on yer head} My poor, poor, tired Annie...Sweetheart, you read this one in December...& quoted the same part!!! hehehe Ohhh, I love ya, Ain...ya made me giggle!!! LOL I'm glad ya still like it that much, my Bestest Ever!!! Muahhh!!! Ya silly ol' poemy girl...ya gots too many irons in the fire & not enough hittin' the snooze button, Ain... {does the hypnotizin' eyes atcha, Hopin' you'll get some good sleepin' in tonight} Wander
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Beautiful!!!
Wander, BRAVO! This is stunning, I can't see this not winning! And the rhyming Fantastic!
I love this part!:
The moon speaks softly in my ear;
whispers, "There's no need to fear
the passing of another year;
Seeds tossed casually, then left alone,
have struggled wildly, but have grown---
It is a secret I have known
and kept
and touched, in awe,
while others slept."
This is amazing, such treasures in your past, I'm so glad you are sharing them once again I absolutely love this! All the best in the contest sweetie, GOLDEN! Much love, Annie
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Loved this quite much. I enjoy your choice of words. (My own I find to be somewhat dull, but english is not my mothertounge, so I am a bit handicapped..... )
You're a great poet, but I suppose some of it has to do with maturity (I can't spell today . You're about the same age as my father. He's a song writer, btw. (doesn't really matter so why do I write it?)
I guess when you have seen more of life, you learn to express yourself better...
You do it well, in any case. Sorry for boring you with mindless details
Love, MJ
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